28 October 2006 @ 09:21 pm
[Fic] A Kiss to Make it better - 1x2 - PG-13  

[mood| cheerful]

First and foremost I just want to say a huge giant THANK YOU to each and every person on my flist who answered to my previous post. I can't put into words what you guys really mean to me, and even though it's taking me some time, I'm going to answer to each and every comment I received so, stay tunned for possible reply-spam on your e-mails ;D

Now, I should warn you all this is a fic post.
It's the first of what hopefully can be more in the future. It's YAOI and it's anime related. Gundam Wing/ Heero x Duo related so, some of you, j-rock fans only of my flist might wanna skip this one. For the Gundam Wing/Yaoi fans of the flist: Be welcome, and reviews are love!


 
 



Title: A kiss to make it better
Author:[profile] misao_duo
Pairing:Heero + Duo
Rating:PG-13
Warnings: WAFF, tiny wee bitsy of angst, Preventer-ness and Mission-ness
Spoilers: not a single one. This takes place after Endless Waltz, Heero and Duo are Preventers.
Author notes: beta-ed by the most lovely and very wonderfull [personal profile] cristal (thank you so very much my dear)

Disclaimer: Me? Own Gundam Wing? If I owned the show would be NC-17 rated the ending would most definitely be different



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‘A kiss to make it better’

 

            The expression had turned into one of our many ‘intern jokes’, born by chance in the middle of a critic and completely inappropriate moment for something like that. Obviously, things like that were quite common and expected in my partnership with Duo Maxwell.

 

            Maybe the unexpected part of that little ordeal was the fact that it was me who came up with the joke, instead of my partner.

           

            We were in the middle of a mission. Duo was assigned to work in the field while I would be staying in one of the Preventers vehicles near the place where things were happening, checking video feeds and giving out coordinates. 

 

            Our suspects – that at the rate things were happening, quickly gained the status of ‘target’ – started shooting while I was finishing my last preparatives to get in the field along with the second team of agents and, suddenly, I heard Duo’s voice over the little communication device I had inside my ear. He sounded like he was in pain.

           

            ‘Maxwell!’, I answered immediately, knowing he could hear me through a similar device in his own ear. ‘Status?’

 

            ‘I’ve been hit’, he answered right away, breathing with difficulty. By the sounds he was making, I could tell he was trying to keep on moving as fast as he could, but by the erratic rhythm of his breathing there was no way to be sure if he was going to be able to keep going like that for much longer.

 

            ‘Where?’ was the only word that left my mouth. My mind started running in circles, figuring possible ways to rescue my partner. It wasn’t common for Preventers to be hit, since the uniform used for missions included a bulletproof vest. If Duo was shot, the wound could be possibly a dangerous one.

 

            The mere thought of a wound of any kind was enough to make a chill run down my spine and my hands get unstable  for a second or two.

 

            ‘Duo! Where?’ , I repeated some seconds later, wishing with all my will that he would just answer me.

           

            I listened to his elaborated breathing for some seconds and then, ‘On my foot’, he said. ‘I was hit on the foot...I don’t...I’m not sure if I can make it to the meeting point.’

           

            There was no way I could rescue him in time, and if Duo stayed where he was, he would turn himself into an easy target. I had to find a way to get him out of that building, to make him move, and fast.

 

            ‘Heero...I really can’t...’, he started, and something in the tone of his voice told me I didn’t really want to hear the rest of that particular sentence.

 

            The chill on my spine spread to the rest of my body when I was faced with the possibility of Duo being intercepted by someone. In that moment, many feelings and thoughts danced through my mind, the strongest of them all being fear. Fear that Duo wouldn’t come back safe, fear of not hearing his voice ever again... but then, fear wasn’t something I could allow myself to feel in a time like that.

 

            I decided to cling to the feeling I had hope would help me get through it.

 

            ‘Listen to me Duo’, I yelled impatiently, ‘you put that damn foot of yours on the goddamed floor and drag your stupid ass to the point 563P right this moment, do you hear me?’

 

            Anger. Duo had no right to abandon me yet, not yet, not in that way. I knew that yelling would most definitely get a reaction out of him, it would stir him into action of some kind. All I could hope for was that his indignation would be strong enough to make him move, and do something about it.

 

            ‘Heero!’, he answered immediately, his breathing heavier with each passing second. ‘I’m in no condition to...’

 

            ‘No condition?’, I answered without letting him finish properly while I finally ran like a bullet to the point I had just told him to get to. ‘C’mon Maxwell! Don’t tell me you can’t deal with a little scratch on your foot!’

 

            ‘Heero...’, there was a dangerous warning in his voice, I could feel it, and the knowledge that my efforts were resulting in something  put a sarcastic little smile on my face. We were really idiots if a mere challenge was all it took to push us forward like that.

 

            ‘What’s the matter?’, I said, sarcasm dripping off of my voice, ‘You want me to go there and kiss it to make it better?’

 

            ‘You will be kissing my fucking knuckles once I get to you, you bastard!’, was the answer I got, and, for the first time in my whole life, I was glad to be insulted and threatened.         

 

            That day Duo got to the meeting point five minutes after I did and was taken immediately to surgery. Later, when I went visiting, taking with me reports, congratulations from commander Une and having one of my hands completely bandaged due to some unexpected events that had happened during the mission, he thanked me, saying that I always knew exactly what to say to him during extreme situations.

 

            ‘The mere idea of seeing Heero Yuy kissing my foot was enough to make me run as fast as my legs would take me’, he said jokingly.

 

            ‘Don’t you worry’, I told him, ‘next time, I will make sure I get shot in the ass so you can pay me back.’

 

His laugher filled the room, and I couldn’t help but smile at him.

 

            On that day, we established the expression between us and from that moment on, in every mission, in every new wound that one of us got, there was the promise of retaliation.

 

‘C’mon Yuy’, he would say, ‘Will you let that little, ridiculous excuse of a wound slow you down?’, to which I usually answered with a grunt.

 

‘Want me to kiss and make it better?’, he’d say in a ridiculous baby’s voice, and even though our mutual bullying was completely idiotic and made no sense to any other agent that happened to hear the exchange, to us it worked like a true calling. Like an ultimatum that said in no uncertain terms that we would always get back to each other’s side.

 

The expression had become a common occurrence in our missions for some time when the accident happened.

 

Me and Jones were in the middle of a car chase, Duo and Wufei were inside one of the three other cars that were on the way to a point where they would intercept the fugitives. The plan was to make a barrier near the town limits to stop the car we were chasing from advancing any further.

 

The fugitives had other ideas, though. One of them shot one of the tires of my car, making the vehicle lose control and crash. The last thing I felt was something hitting my right side. The pain made me pass out. 

 

I woke up to the sound of a voice whispering near me, and some pressure on my forehead.

 

‘Wake up, wake up, wake up, please, please, please, please...’ the voice said, and I opened my eyes slowly, not recognizing my surrounds immediately. All I could see was a blur.

 

‘Please, please, please, please...’ the voice kept saying, and I finally realized who the voice belonged to.

 

‘Duo?’ I asked, my voice raspy, making my throat hurt.

 

The pressure on my face immediately ceased. Duo had had his forehead against mine and his face suddenly came into focus when he put a little distance between us to look at me properly.

 

‘Heero? Oh thank god!’, he said, taking my face in his hands carefully, and kissing my temple. That simple contact made heat rush rapidly to my face. My partner then went back to touching his forehead against mine, closing his eyes and sighing in relief.

‘Duo?’, I asked in a whisper, not wanting to ruin the strangely intimate moment with words.


‘Yeah Heero?’, he answered, not opening his eyes.


‘I...can’t feel my legs’, I told him.

 

‘They have you sedated’, he said calmly, stroking his cheek against my face tenderly and making me close my eyes to fully appreciate the moment.

 

‘Does that mean I’m going to be in a lot of pain soon?’, I asked with a sigh, rubbing my face against his almost instinctively. It felt so good...

 

‘Don’t worry’ , he answered me, putting some distance between us again and  holding my face with both of his hands. ‘You are going to be just fine. And you know, I can always kiss you to make it feel better’, he concluded with a little smile, giving me a look that said much more than what the light twitch of lips and the careless tone in his voice did.

 

I sent him a look that was equally serious and loaded with meaning, and we stayed like that for a moment. I could clearly see that Duo was having second thoughts now, his expression changing into a light frown while he bit his lips slightly, probably wondering if he had accidentally revealed too much.

 

‘Do you promise?’, I asked.

 

I saw the exact instant in which his expression changed, opening up in the most beautiful of smiles.

 

The next moment, my vision was blurred again when Duo’s face got closer to mine. I closed my eyes and felt a light pressure on my lips, drowning in the wonderful sensation that enveloped me completely.

 

‘I will kiss every single inch of your body on the first chance I get if that makes you feel any better.’, he whispered against my lips, his forehead against mine once again.

 

‘I can hardly wait’, I told him, rubbing our noses together sweetly , and sighing.

 

The last thing I felt before falling asleep again was Duo’s smile against my face, and his voice, softly in my ear.

 

‘Neither can I, Heero’, the voice said, ‘neither can I.’




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Bear in mind that this was my very first fic wrote in english! It's beta-ed but little mistakes here and there could happen.
Reviews and constructive criticism are very welcome but please don't be mean to me T_T...

 
 
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[identity profile] velvet-burns.livejournal.com on October 29th, 2006 01:22 am (UTC)
OMFG I just exploded with the cute. rjghaelkyh,kmgahsdmgbdm;gher *scrambled keyboard mashing of love* I'm staying with a friend tonight and she just looked up at me worried when I squeaked. SO freaking cute, and brilliantly written. =DDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDD *joy*
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[identity profile] misao-duo.livejournal.com on October 30th, 2006 04:15 pm (UTC)
Awww your comment was the first one I got and you have absolutely NO idea of how happy it made me. I mean, here I was all worried about people liking my fic or not and you gave me the sweetest comment ever! *hugs*
Thank you, thank you so much for reading and for liking it as well ;D
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ext_25574[identity profile] seraphim-grace.livejournal.com on October 29th, 2006 01:42 am (UTC)
This is really sweet, and the English is fine, I could see no mistakes, but bear in mind I wasn't looking.

there is a comm called [livejournal.com profile] gw_safehouse which is specifically for the warm and fuzzy fics, post it there, it deserves a wider audience, and if you're not already a memebr there is the GWfan ml, the 1x2x1ml and the dhml, if you need the addresses let me know
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[identity profile] misao-duo.livejournal.com on October 30th, 2006 04:20 pm (UTC)
Wah, this made me sooo happy, specially comming from you! *hugs*
(and in case you didn't know already, I'm a big fan of your fics ^___^~♥)

I posted it to [livejournal.com profile] 1x2_fans and also on [livejournal.com profile] gw_bakery. Many people who read this probably came from those two comms. And it didn't cross my mind to post it to any ML until you pointed it out, but I guess I might as well post it on the 1x2ML
Thank you for your comment *hugs some more*
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[identity profile] xmad-alicex.livejournal.com on October 29th, 2006 01:55 am (UTC)
Awww~! That was just too cute X3. You should seriously write some more. I can't believe english is your second language >_< No one would ever think so, with the way you write.

♥ Loved it :)
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[identity profile] misao-duo.livejournal.com on October 30th, 2006 04:23 pm (UTC)
Hahaah yeah it is my second language! But like I told you, this fic was written in portuguese and then I translated my own fic to english which was...a little weird, a little tough cause I didn't want to make any stupid mistakes... but cool at the same time XD

I'm soooo very glad you liked it! ~♥
Thanks for reading it, and I'm sure as hell wanting to write more now cause the response to this one was sooo positive...*melts into happy goo*
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[identity profile] asia-2.livejournal.com on October 29th, 2006 02:03 am (UTC)
Every single inche on his body! Really? (*@_@*) Can we watch? *giggle*
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[identity profile] misao-duo.livejournal.com on October 30th, 2006 04:24 pm (UTC)
Hahaha Duo is a greedy, greedy man! Can't really blame him....
Yes you can watch, but don't let Heero catch you ;D
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[identity profile] ka-dono.livejournal.com on October 29th, 2006 02:14 am (UTC)
YEYYYY YOU FIRST fIC ON LJ!!!
that really should be celebrated!!!^^~

and ZOMG anmabndjiwefabsdca fajbdabdajfbizcnkwjfc ca werbajsbdiuqwbedqubdiaud

you kill me with this PERFERCT ENDING!!! zoomg it was so... so 2x1!!!!Gorgeouss!!! and damn that concept on the 'intern jokes' are so us!XD~
well want more that i have to say? there's a little bit of you there *well of course* and you always make the Best 'Duo's' e 'Heero's' ever!XD~

congratulations honey!^^~ and i hope that it's only the beginning!^^~
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[identity profile] misao-duo.livejournal.com on October 30th, 2006 04:36 pm (UTC)
WAHHHH YES!!! Let's celebrate it, allright!
Image Image Image

Mwuahahah I'm sooo happy that you liked! *huggles forever*
Actually the real concept of the fic was built around the 'kiss it better' expression, but the 'intern joke' thing totally reminds me of us cause...you know we have so damn much of those XDDD

And yeah there's a little of me there in both of them but that...*ponders* is just cause you know me too well ;D

Thank you for your constant support dear!
You know it means a lot to me! ^__________^~♥

congratulations honey!^^~ and i hope that it's only the beginning!^^~
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(no subject) - [identity profile] ka-dono.livejournal.com on October 30th, 2006 10:28 pm (UTC)
Yanagi[identity profile] yanagi-wa.livejournal.com on October 29th, 2006 02:19 am (UTC)
I thought it was really good. There are people who've been writing in English a lot longer who do much worse. And they grew up speaking it. I thought the whole thing was very good. Grammer and punctuation were very good. Content was excellent. Very good job.
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[identity profile] misao-duo.livejournal.com on October 30th, 2006 04:39 pm (UTC)
Thank you so very much!
I was really insecure about my english cause even though I've been studying it for many years now I didn't really want to make a stupid mistake on my first fic ever. In the end, seens like a lot of people liked the fic and I'm very proud of it!
Thank you for taking the time to comment ^__^~♥

*joy*

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[identity profile] jade-sage.livejournal.com on October 29th, 2006 02:20 am (UTC)
Oooh, so nice! And the English was actually better than a lot of native-speaking writers I've read, so no worries there.
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[identity profile] misao-duo.livejournal.com on October 30th, 2006 04:44 pm (UTC)
Thank you ^__________^~♥
I was really worried about the english but many people told me it's actually better than some native-speakers, and that makes me all kinds of happy and proud!
Thanks for reviewing =333
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(Anonymous) on October 29th, 2006 02:23 am (UTC)
awww....how sweet
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[identity profile] misao-duo.livejournal.com on October 30th, 2006 04:44 pm (UTC)
Thank you ^___________^~♥
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[identity profile] the-carl.livejournal.com on October 29th, 2006 03:09 am (UTC)
I GIVE IT TWO THUMBS WAY UP! :D I love it. It was very well writen, and I love how you just kept it going to the end. Very nice! :D YAY!
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[identity profile] misao-duo.livejournal.com on October 30th, 2006 04:46 pm (UTC)
YAAAY!!! =D
Thank you so much! I was worried there for a moment that it would sound a little rushed but people doesn't seen to think that happened.
Thank you for reviewing ;D
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[identity profile] tsuki-bug.livejournal.com on October 29th, 2006 03:21 am (UTC)
Awww, I love it. I love that expression, too.
Please keep writing!!!

-Junebug = )
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[identity profile] misao-duo.livejournal.com on October 30th, 2006 04:49 pm (UTC)
Don't we all love that expression? ;D
I have plans on keep writting now that I have proof that I'm capable of doing a decent job.
Keep an eye out for me ;333

Thanks for commenting!~♥
*hugs*
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[identity profile] braided-one.livejournal.com on October 29th, 2006 03:54 am (UTC)
EEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEE!!!!!!! (it was great!)
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[identity profile] misao-duo.livejournal.com on October 30th, 2006 04:51 pm (UTC)
YAAAAAAAAAAAAY! *dances around*
Thank you so much, I'm very happy that you liked
^_________^~♥
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[identity profile] prussianblue1x2.livejournal.com on October 29th, 2006 05:19 am (UTC)
ah that was so good. i absolutely loved it. heero and duo were so sweet.
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[identity profile] misao-duo.livejournal.com on October 30th, 2006 04:55 pm (UTC)
Ahhh thank youuuu ^_____^~♥
I tried to make them sweet (but not overly so) cause that's how I see them. Glad you like it ;D

and oh look, I made that icon ~♥*
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(no subject) - [identity profile] prussianblue1x2.livejournal.com on October 31st, 2006 02:49 am (UTC)
[identity profile] okaasan59.livejournal.com on October 29th, 2006 05:46 am (UTC)
That was lovely. And it proved that two guys can share a sweet moment without being girly.
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[identity profile] misao-duo.livejournal.com on October 30th, 2006 05:00 pm (UTC)
Oh yeah, no girlyness around here, just ...sweetness ;D
I'm super happy that you liked, thank you so much for commenting ~♥
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[identity profile] m-buggie.livejournal.com on October 29th, 2006 07:01 am (UTC)
Two words: LOVE IT.
:)
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[identity profile] misao-duo.livejournal.com on October 30th, 2006 05:06 pm (UTC)
THANK YOU
^_____________________^~♥
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[identity profile] wickedgameff.livejournal.com on October 29th, 2006 07:19 am (UTC)
adored it! you drabbled for me once (remember?)

it was great. so cute and sweet.

you should go post it on the [livejournal.com profile] gw_bakery, for all the cute and fluffy things that make us all go, "awww!"
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[identity profile] misao-duo.livejournal.com on October 30th, 2006 05:09 pm (UTC)
Of course I remember ^___^~♥
I also remember that you offered to beta for me, and I thought about you when I first finished the fic, but then I read on your LJ that you were sick and not feeling very well so I decided no to bother you with it, and gave the fic to another friend.

I'm so glad that you liked. Means a lot to me to have my first fic being so well received on the fandom =333

And I posted a link for it on the bakery ;D
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[identity profile] traveling-storm.livejournal.com on October 29th, 2006 08:40 am (UTC)
I join dmnurtle with the flailing and squeaking and fjlJBfviubvkjanfkv keyboard mashing of love! *squeals* This was utter PERFECTION!!!!!! Thank you so much for sharing this!
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[identity profile] misao-duo.livejournal.com on October 30th, 2006 05:12 pm (UTC)
Awwwww uter perfection *__________*~♥
I think I love you! *hugs you silly*
Thank you so much! It means a lot to me that my first fic was so well received by so many people. Definetly makes me want to write many more on the future ;D

Again, thank you so very much for commenting ;D
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(no subject) - [identity profile] velvet-burns.livejournal.com on October 30th, 2006 06:21 pm (UTC)
[identity profile] fly-little-wing.livejournal.com on October 29th, 2006 09:13 am (UTC)
*smiles* I think it's safe to say it's a success, ne? Now, will you believe me when I tell you're not lame and that your fics are good?

Something I didn't tell you on msn yesterday because you probably wouldn't have believed me anyway: I'm so damn proud of you for having translated your fic. It's difficult, but you did a wonderful job at it and I'm honoured you asked me to beta it for you.

If you need me to beta something for you again (which I hope will happen), you know where to find me ^_~

*hugglescuddlessnugglesbitesloves*
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[identity profile] misao-duo.livejournal.com on October 30th, 2006 05:18 pm (UTC)
Well, I guess it is safe to say that it's a sucess. I was hoping I would get some nice feedback cause - like in all my other fics - that was a lot of genuine effort involved in this one, but I never really thought it was going to be this good, seriously, I'm completely shocked and very happy as well (as in 'giddy with joy' kinda happy ;DDD)

Awwwwwwwwww *huggles*
Thank you! Thank you , thank you so much!
Translating your own stuff is tough but at the same time it's better than translating other people's work since you are more at a liberty. I'm all kinds of excited now, and wanting to translate some of my other fics. I was thinking about starting with that one I made as a b-day gift for my friend in Japan. I will adapt it to use it as a gift for another friend here on LJ since, well, she can't really read in portuguese ;D
Think that's a good idea?

I will try not to bother you too much with the beta-ing bussiness, and I'll most definetly try not to keep you awake next time, but, either way, I'm sure you know how FREAKING much I appreciate your help and constant support, don't you? I know you do!

*hugglescuddlessnugglesbitesloves x infinity x Saga*

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(no subject) - [identity profile] fly-little-wing.livejournal.com on October 31st, 2006 08:12 am (UTC)
(no subject) - [identity profile] misao-duo.livejournal.com on November 1st, 2006 12:40 am (UTC)
(no subject) - [identity profile] fly-little-wing.livejournal.com on November 1st, 2006 07:51 am (UTC)
(no subject) - [identity profile] misao-duo.livejournal.com on November 1st, 2006 05:26 pm (UTC)
(no subject) - [identity profile] fly-little-wing.livejournal.com on November 1st, 2006 05:48 pm (UTC)
(no subject) - [identity profile] misao-duo.livejournal.com on November 2nd, 2006 10:49 pm (UTC)
(no subject) - [identity profile] fly-little-wing.livejournal.com on November 3rd, 2006 07:56 am (UTC)
(no subject) - [identity profile] misao-duo.livejournal.com on November 5th, 2006 08:58 pm (UTC)
[identity profile] lysander-o.livejournal.com on October 29th, 2006 09:43 am (UTC)
That was so cute! Loved it! And your English was really good no worries there! Really liked the interaction between the two characters. Keep up the good work!
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[identity profile] misao-duo.livejournal.com on October 30th, 2006 05:21 pm (UTC)
Thank you so very much! ~♥
I'm very very happy that you loved the fic, and even more so cause you thought my english was good. Sounds kinda silly, I know, but I was really worried cause it was my first fic.

You will probably see more stuff from me soon ;D
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(no subject) - [identity profile] lysander-o.livejournal.com on October 30th, 2006 10:18 pm (UTC)
[identity profile] yaminokurisu.livejournal.com on October 29th, 2006 10:22 am (UTC)
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[identity profile] misao-duo.livejournal.com on October 30th, 2006 05:22 pm (UTC)
Guess that means you liked it ^___________^~♥
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(no subject) - [identity profile] yaminokurisu.livejournal.com on October 30th, 2006 05:25 pm (UTC)
[identity profile] parfaire.livejournal.com on October 29th, 2006 10:30 am (UTC)
...

Oh my god, I don't even support this pairing but this.. THIS fic is soooo damn fucking sweet!! Like chocolate dipper into honey sweet! X3 I especially love that last part when Duo whispered 'I will kiss every sinlge inch of your body' was just.. woah. *extremely impressed and rolls*

I really REALLY love the way you write and use expressions Misao, its like, when I read your fic, I feel like I'm reading poetry! *__* Seriously, I can't believe this is your first ever english fic! Its just SO good! You wouldn't wanna read my first ever fanfic, honestly lol! And hell, I didn't really notice any grammar errors!

Anyways.. OMG YOU HAVETA WRITE SOME SMUT SOON KTHNXBI~! >3
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[identity profile] fly-little-wing.livejournal.com on October 29th, 2006 08:56 pm (UTC)
She should write some RikuxSora or AxelxRoxas smut :333
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(no subject) - [identity profile] parfaire.livejournal.com on October 30th, 2006 09:29 am (UTC)
(no subject) - [identity profile] fly-little-wing.livejournal.com on October 30th, 2006 09:45 am (UTC)
(no subject) - [identity profile] parfaire.livejournal.com on October 30th, 2006 10:08 am (UTC)
(no subject) - [identity profile] misao-duo.livejournal.com on October 30th, 2006 05:26 pm (UTC)
(no subject) - [identity profile] parfaire.livejournal.com on October 31st, 2006 03:17 am (UTC)
(no subject) - [identity profile] misao-duo.livejournal.com on November 1st, 2006 12:05 am (UTC)
(no subject) - [identity profile] parfaire.livejournal.com on November 1st, 2006 11:02 am (UTC)
(no subject) - [identity profile] misao-duo.livejournal.com on November 1st, 2006 07:45 pm (UTC)
(no subject) - [identity profile] parfaire.livejournal.com on November 3rd, 2006 06:13 am (UTC)
(no subject) - [identity profile] misao-duo.livejournal.com on November 5th, 2006 07:45 pm (UTC)
(no subject) - [identity profile] parfaire.livejournal.com on November 18th, 2006 01:21 am (UTC)
(no subject) - [identity profile] misao-duo.livejournal.com on November 20th, 2006 12:06 pm (UTC)
(no subject) - [identity profile] parfaire.livejournal.com on November 21st, 2006 01:09 am (UTC)
(no subject) - [identity profile] misao-duo.livejournal.com on October 30th, 2006 05:25 pm (UTC)
(no subject) - [identity profile] misao-duo.livejournal.com on October 30th, 2006 05:35 pm (UTC)
(no subject) - [identity profile] parfaire.livejournal.com on October 31st, 2006 03:21 am (UTC)
(no subject) - [identity profile] misao-duo.livejournal.com on November 1st, 2006 12:08 am (UTC)
(no subject) - [identity profile] parfaire.livejournal.com on November 1st, 2006 11:05 am (UTC)
[identity profile] sharona1x2.livejournal.com on October 29th, 2006 12:52 pm (UTC)
You did a wonderful job with it! Is this the story that would have been for my contest? If so, I'd like to add it to my 2006 contest archive, if that's okay. ^_________^
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[identity profile] misao-duo.livejournal.com on October 30th, 2006 06:35 pm (UTC)
Awwwww no,I won't lie to you, Sharon ^.^;;;
This wasn't supposed to be on your contest. It was born out of an idea that came to my mind just a few days ago...so, wah, sorry! TT___TT
Someday I still might do something you might want to archive on your wonderfull site.
I'm looking foward to next years contest ;D
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[identity profile] brandella.livejournal.com on October 29th, 2006 01:58 pm (UTC)
That gave me so much joy!
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[identity profile] misao-duo.livejournal.com on October 30th, 2006 06:36 pm (UTC)
I'm glad it did ^__________^~♥
Thanks for reading it *hugs*
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[identity profile] lovetoujours.livejournal.com on October 29th, 2006 03:52 pm (UTC)
aww that was so good! ♥♥
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[identity profile] misao-duo.livejournal.com on October 30th, 2006 06:38 pm (UTC)
YAAAAAAAAAAY! \^_______________^/
I'm so happy that you like it Ellie!
*huggles you silly*
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(no subject) - [identity profile] lovetoujours.livejournal.com on October 30th, 2006 06:42 pm (UTC)
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(no subject) - [identity profile] lovetoujours.livejournal.com on October 30th, 2006 07:13 pm (UTC)
[identity profile] gazette-mor.livejournal.com on October 29th, 2006 06:44 pm (UTC)
That was so cute and just awesome!! Especially since it was your first fic *__* That "I will kiss every inch of your body" part was just.. sooo yummy =X *hugs* Btw, my first comment on your LJ and already full of too much fangirlism ne? XD *hides* *hugs you*
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[identity profile] fly-little-wing.livejournal.com on October 29th, 2006 08:51 pm (UTC)
my first comment on your LJ and already full of too much fangirlism ne?

Don't worry, she loves it ^_~ And she's used to a very large dosis of fangirlism with me around XDXDXDXD
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(no subject) - [identity profile] fly-little-wing.livejournal.com on October 29th, 2006 08:52 pm (UTC)
(no subject) - [identity profile] toujin1.livejournal.com on October 30th, 2006 06:50 am (UTC)
(no subject) - [identity profile] fly-little-wing.livejournal.com on October 30th, 2006 07:06 am (UTC)
(no subject) - [identity profile] misao-duo.livejournal.com on October 30th, 2006 06:45 pm (UTC)
(no subject) - [identity profile] fly-little-wing.livejournal.com on October 30th, 2006 07:57 pm (UTC)
(no subject) - [identity profile] misao-duo.livejournal.com on October 30th, 2006 08:12 pm (UTC)
(no subject) - [identity profile] toujin1.livejournal.com on October 31st, 2006 02:43 am (UTC)
(no subject) - [identity profile] fly-little-wing.livejournal.com on October 31st, 2006 08:20 am (UTC)
(no subject) - [identity profile] toujin1.livejournal.com on October 31st, 2006 09:11 am (UTC)
(no subject) - [identity profile] fly-little-wing.livejournal.com on October 31st, 2006 09:19 am (UTC)
(no subject) - [identity profile] misao-duo.livejournal.com on November 1st, 2006 12:44 am (UTC)
(no subject) - [identity profile] fly-little-wing.livejournal.com on November 1st, 2006 07:56 am (UTC)
(no subject) - [identity profile] misao-duo.livejournal.com on November 1st, 2006 05:31 pm (UTC)
(no subject) - [identity profile] gazette-mor.livejournal.com on October 30th, 2006 08:58 am (UTC)
(no subject) - [identity profile] fly-little-wing.livejournal.com on October 30th, 2006 09:06 am (UTC)
(no subject) - [identity profile] misao-duo.livejournal.com on October 30th, 2006 06:46 pm (UTC)
(no subject) - [identity profile] fly-little-wing.livejournal.com on October 30th, 2006 07:48 pm (UTC)
(no subject) - [identity profile] misao-duo.livejournal.com on October 30th, 2006 07:54 pm (UTC)
(no subject) - [identity profile] fly-little-wing.livejournal.com on October 30th, 2006 07:55 pm (UTC)
(no subject) - [identity profile] misao-duo.livejournal.com on October 30th, 2006 08:10 pm (UTC)
(no subject) - [identity profile] fly-little-wing.livejournal.com on October 30th, 2006 08:12 pm (UTC)
(no subject) - [identity profile] misao-duo.livejournal.com on October 30th, 2006 06:42 pm (UTC)
(no subject) - [identity profile] gazette-mor.livejournal.com on October 31st, 2006 06:38 am (UTC)
(no subject) - [identity profile] misao-duo.livejournal.com on November 1st, 2006 12:31 am (UTC)
(no subject) - [identity profile] gazette-mor.livejournal.com on November 1st, 2006 02:29 pm (UTC)
[identity profile] o-o4.livejournal.com on October 30th, 2006 06:11 am (UTC)
‘next time, I will make sure I get shot in the ass so you can pay me back.’
NGAHAHAAHAHAHAHHHAAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA *felt like a loser when I cracked up from reading that, which of course, broke the silence of 1:41 in the morning of my insomnia* And I really don't think whatever I said made sense, but I'm too jittery to give a damn OYAY 8B

*takes a dramatic pause*

I HAVE WAITED FOR THIS DAY TT^TT and seriously woman, YOUR ENGLISH IS PERFECT AND YOU KNOW IT AND IT'S LIKE, BETTER THAN MINE T_T

As soon as I saw that you had written a fanfic in English, I was like SAKJNJKAZNDHAUJKA O______O SNXCUJHQAJKUIEHNAEHFAOHUEHNQAOUIHF WAUUUUUUUUUU And no matter what, even if I was not familiar with the characters and intern jokes, I was going to read it. And not only that, but I was going to savour it in all its glory and read in complete and utter silence. And spazz to myself. And then regurgitate the spazzing into my typing into this comment of doom from the dorkface that is I! 8DDDDD

Well what can I say, I have always wanted to spam you with a comprehensive comment to a fanfic of yours. And now I can! HEEHEEHEEHEE~ 8D

I'm familiar with the anime and the character names, and I know what Heero looks like, 'cause he's hot like fire. WOYAY! 8D But the bad thing is that I have never watched a single episode of it and I don't really know what Gundam's all about. But you know what? I . STILL . FREAKING . LOVED . IT .

The very first aspect of this fic that I noticed was that it is very well written I could cry from joy. Secondly, that it was action-packed which I adore because the jrock fics I read usually lack that factor of physical danger and whatnot. So that was interesting. Also, it was filled with the AWESOME HUMOUR that is PINGU'S!!! And you know me, I heart comedy muchly. Especially with a sense of humour like yours ;D

And last but most definitely not least, THE CUTENESS OF THEIR RELATIONSHIP <333333 which made me go all giddy and happy inside. And I must admit that I read the entire fic with a smile.

Truly this was awesome, and I really hope you write more fics in English when and if you have the time 'cause... PINGU RAWKS!!!!!

8{B
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[identity profile] toujin1.livejournal.com on October 30th, 2006 06:48 am (UTC)
Never seen GW?? *Grins* I can change that...
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(no subject) - [identity profile] o-o4.livejournal.com on October 30th, 2006 07:00 am (UTC)
(no subject) - [identity profile] toujin1.livejournal.com on October 30th, 2006 07:03 am (UTC)
(no subject) - [identity profile] misao-duo.livejournal.com on October 31st, 2006 12:44 am (UTC)
(no subject) - [identity profile] o-o4.livejournal.com on October 31st, 2006 07:22 am (UTC)